阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Twelve Days of Kindness
Although it was less than two weeks before Christmas I found it difficult to be in a festive mood. We had moved to Canada, and holidays were difficult for us because we missed our friends and relatives in Minnesota. Our family was also going through a very difficult year, with health problems and a serious work-related problem for my husband.
“Mom,How I wish we could spend Christmas with Grandpa and Grandma in Minnesota. I really miss them and my friends there.”said my fifteen-year-old daughter,Rachel.
“I know,Rachel. So would I”I said.”But Minnesota is 2,000 kilometers away. Don't you remember how hard it was to drive in that snowstorm last year? And then the temperature dropped to -30℃ on our way back?”
“I remember.” she said and ducked her head disappointedly.
We thought driving to Minnesota for Christmas was too risky and buying airline tickets for three people was out of the question.We would be spending Christmas alone in Canada, and had no money for a Christmas tree or a Christmas dinner.
We were surprised when the doorbell rang. It was dark and cold outside, and we weren’t expecting anyone. Hesitantly, Rachel stood up and went forward to open the door, and then said,”Mom , there's a big box on the doorstep and nobody is out here!”My husband also went and looked. But there was nobody in sight.
They brought the box in.We were surprised to find that the box contained many packages covered in bright Christmas paper. Each had a typewritten note:Open Dec.14Open There were a total of twelve-the”Twelve Days of Christmas.”The note read: Our LOVE is given anonymously(匿名地), so enjoy fun with your family,but don’t tell anyone please.
礼物，但是不能是返家的机票，因为前文对于买机票的可能性予以否定，后文内容应结合前文的逻辑进行展开。或者直接模糊礼物内容，下面的范文就是采取的模糊化。另外就是对于送机票的人设计上，有两个方向，一个是陌生人，另外就是亲朋好友，亲朋好友部分容易把内容扩大，前文对于亲朋好友的信息支撑过少，后续需要提供一定的逻辑合理支撑，导致文章的篇幅过大。再者如果假设陌生人会使得文章的价值观得到提升，体现陌生人们之间的淳朴的善意。
继承者们插曲女生唱的十二天的善意
虽然离圣诞节还有不到两周的时间，但我发现很难有节日的气氛。我们搬到了加拿大，假期对我们来说很困难，因为我们想念在明尼苏达州的朋友和亲戚。我们家也经历了非常艰难的一年，我丈夫有健康问题和工作方面也困难重重。
“妈妈，我多么希望我们能在明尼苏达州和爷爷奶奶一起过圣诞节。我真的很想念他们和我在那里的朋友。”我 15 岁的女儿雷切尔说。
“我知道，雷切尔。我也是”我说。“但是明尼苏达州在 2,000 公里之外。你不记得去年那场暴风雪中开车有多难吗？然后回来的路上气温降到了-30℃？”
“我记得。”她说着失望地低下了头。
我们认为圣诞节开车去明尼苏达州太冒险了，买三个人的机票也是不可能的。我们将独自在加拿大过圣诞节，没有钱买圣诞树或圣诞晚餐。
门铃响起时，我们很惊讶。外面又黑又冷，我们没想到会有人。瑞秋犹豫了一下，站起来上前去开门，然后说：“妈妈，门口有个大箱子，外面没人！” 老公也去看了。但是没看见人。
他们把箱子搬了进来。我们惊讶地发现箱子里装着许多包裹，上面覆盖着鲜艳的圣诞纸。每个人都有一张打字的纸条：Open Dec.14Open 总共有十二个——“圣诞节的十二天”。家人，但请不要告诉任何人。
注意:
1. 续写短文的词数应为150 左右:
2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1:
After that, we opened one more gift each day.
Paragraph 2:
We opened the 12th package on December 25th.
写在前面的话:
送送个人觉得本次续写题目的开放性很强,可以写的故事情节多种多样,只要言之成理能够自圆其即可。但是就标题Twelve Days of Kindness而言,陌生人或者社区邻居的帮助与善意最符合题意。
After that,we opened one more gift each day.
1⃣️拆礼物：具体有哪些与圣诞相关的礼物：玩具,圣诞树,围巾,手套,袜子糖果,和衣服等等具体的东西增添画面感与真实的感觉。
(适当补充:陌生人似乎知道我们正处于困境之中。奇怪的是,每一件东西都呵护我们的心意。为下文爷爷奶奶以及亲戚朋友送礼物的真相斗气冤家埋下伏笔。)
(部分同学在这里的问题在于拆了太多次礼物,描写地过于繁琐。)游击队歌
2⃣️情绪变化:面对礼物时的惊喜与开心+好奇究竟是谁送来的礼物
血疑主题曲歌词3⃣️衔接部分:
It wasn’t long before the Christmas approached.特殊句式,用时间推动情节发展;
With the time ticking away,the Christmas approached/was around the corner. With 的复合结构表明时间变化;
Our heart swelling with/ charged with/ anticipation/expectation,we waiting for the last gift.用情绪描写刻画我们对最后一个礼物的期待。
We opened the 12th package on December 25th.
第一种情节：
1⃣️迫不及待地打开第12份礼物
2⃣️一封信+信的内容
3⃣️知道真相后,我们的情绪变化
(这里也可以写信上让我们在某个时刻打开房门,邻居们带着圣诞树或者各食物来和我们一起过圣诞节。)
4⃣️主题升华:环境很冷,鹅毛大雪,但陌生人/社区居民的十二天的善意kind gestures/ anonymous love and support , 让我们战胜了思想之情与孤独,并且我们决心将这份爱与善意传递下去。
第二种情节:
1⃣️迫不及待地拆开礼物
mama marija歌曲2⃣️亲戚朋友和爷爷奶奶的信和飞机票
3⃣️坐飞机回家与家人团聚reunite with
江水滔滔 (其实送送个人觉得这里写到朋友或者家人在圣诞节这天来加拿大看我们的情节也可以接受。)
4⃣️主题升华:这十二天的family love触动了我们的心弦,驱散了我们的思想之情与孤独感/家人是最温暖的存在/(环境描写+升华/as引导倒装）
参考答案：
After that, we opened one more gift each day. Before uncovering the box, we would sit around the table expectantly and made wild guesses at what each package contained. Then came the exciting moment when the mystery would be solved.Everybody would roar with laughter.As each package was unwrapped, we realized it was an unknown Canadian friend who was thinking of us, loving us, and wishing us a wonderful Christmas. Amazement never ceased and the gift opening eventually became a part of our daily routine. We all looked forward to the arrival of Christmas.
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